<p>Comments:</p>
<p>-Your introduction contains no big words--it will probably not get a 12.
-"Especially in football, known as the Monday Morning Quarterback." Don't use fragments.
-"In football, the team that makes the least mistakes wins." It's "fewest," not "least." This cannot get an 11 or 12. This is an inexcusable mistake.
-"Reporters always overanalyze and talk like geniuses." This is inappropriate for an SAT essay. Try to sound more mature when you write. Your essay cannot get a 10 or greater.
-Your whole first paragraph is just a disaster; I don't know where to begin! Your thesis says that there are endless limits and possibilities. How does this apply to your football example? In your paragraph you wrote "it will probably be a different story." This is so vague! "Probably"? And in what way will it be different? You have to elaborate. It's so frustrating to read that "As one can understand there are unlimited answers and reasons," when you don't give any answers or reasons! "None of them are wrong." Grammar mistake: "None" is a singular noun in this case, so it should be "None of the answers is." Even better is "No answer is wrong." Even this sentence is just bewildering. The answers to what???? This essay cannot get an 8 or higher.
-"espeically politics and war." No, "especially IN politics and war." These grammar mistakes may seem small, but when readers read so many, it really adds up. </p>
<p>"The matter of fact is true in World War II during the time when the U.S. was fighting Japan. Japan was a fierce and fearless enemy. They demonstrated their boldness and radical nationalistic feelings by using kamikaze attacks. Kamikazes were suicide pilots who crashed into larger number of enemy troops similar to modern terrorists today."</p>
<p>I just want to cry!!! No reader cares if Japan tried to demonstrate boldness and radical nationalistic feelings.</p>
<p>"In World War II, President Truman had to make a tough decision: should he drop the newly developed atomic bomb on Japan, the United States' fierce and fearless enemy?"</p>
<p>Why is this sentence better? Because it gets to the point. We don't need to know what kamikazes were. We need to get to the decision. What you wrote had grammar issues and was just too long. "Japan was a fierce and fearless enemy. THEY blah blah blah." You can also connect a lot of the sentences, and better yet, get rid of them!</p>
<p>"The American troops and public had grown weary of war and wanted a quick end. It seemed like a reasonable choice but Truman also did not know the true consequences of the bomb. The extent of the Atomic bomb damage and atrocities it would cause was unknown. In the end, as history tells us we know what he decided. Save American lives and drop the bomb. Many years after the fact, historians still debate the decision and mull over the pros and cons."</p>
<p>You said that Truman didn't know the true consequences of the bomb (what are true consequences? And the consequences of what? The consequences of the bomb, or the consequences of DROPPING the bomb?) Then you say that the extent... was unknown. You just said the same thing twice! And where is the "however"? </p>
<p>"In World War II, President Truman had to make a tough decision: should he drop the newly developed atomic bomb on Japan, the United States' fierce and fearless enemy? Truman decided to drop the bomb, in part because the American troops and public had grown weary of the war and wanted a quick end." These two sentences are better than your twelve, but neither discusses the "however," which is the most important part! Why do you mention that historians still debate the decision? How is this relevant?</p>
<p>This essay drops to a 6 or 7.</p>
<p>Conclusion: Dreadful. You need to restate your thesis, go over your examples, and end with a lingering sentence.</p>
<p>This essay drops to a 5.</p>