Please grade my essay

<p>should heroes bedefined aspeople whosay what they think whenwe lack thecourage tosay?</p>

<p>Ms. J.K Rowling said:"As in my story "Harry potter", "Harry" is a character who speaks against evil side whatever happens and always try to protect others.He is a hero is someone who has courage which many people lack to face problems and say what s/he thinks .There are many successful examples like "Ghandi" and "the french revolution".</p>

<p>For sure,all of us know "Mohadas Ghandi ".That brave man .He traveled away from his country for more than twenty years to help the Indians in Africa in taking their rights.He returned to his country trying to unite all people from different religions.He also helped his people to live in an independent country.Finally, because of his courage , he was killed.</p>

<p>On the other hand, we all know that France is republic and not a monarchy.The reason for this is that a small group of people stood against the unfair king to get the rights of the french depressed nation.And so , this small group of heros helped the rest of the people to be brave ant to take all what they needed to.</p>

<p>And finally,heros are the people who have the courage to take their rights or to speak against the wrong side .So,I do agree with Anne Le Mothe "it all begins in darkness,but the stubborn hope & braveness the dawn will come"</p>

<p>This is a weak essay.
I’d give this a 7-8 out of 12</p>

<p>Lacks development of examples. It is Gandhi by the way.</p>

<p>Not that it matters, it is Mohandas by the way,</p>

<p>Very underdeveloped essay. This will probably receive a a 6-8.</p>

<p>6-7 probably</p>

<p>flesh out your examples.. and don’t start with harry potter.. i like the books, but even so, it doesn’t look good to the readers grading the essays</p>

<p>Mahatma or Mohandas Gandhi, btw.. for future reference</p>