<p>Topic: Should people take more responsibility for solving problems that affect their communities or the nation in general?</p>
<p>Essay: ImageShack</a> Album - 2 images</p>
<p>Could someone please grade and comment on my essay? Thanks in advance!</p>
<p>please grade and comment on my essay thanks</p>
<p>Did you answer the prompt? I think it was asking for you to decide whether problems in the community are more important than problems in the nation, not to compare how we currently undertake issues from each catagoery.</p>
<p>Actually, now I’m not sure which interpretation is right. The quotation is:</p>
<p>Many people believe that our government should do more to solve our problems. After all, how can one individual create more jobs or make roads safer or improve the schools or help to provide any of the other benefits that we have come to enjoy? And yet expecting that the government - rather than individuals - should always come up with the solutions to society’s ills may have made us less self-reliant, undermining our independence and self-sufficiency.</p>
<p>Thanks for your help!</p>
<p>Okay, with the quote I’d say that you’re interpretation is correct. With that said, the prose and mechanics of your essay aren’t amazing, but your examples were keen and cohesive with your thesis. Although, I noticed that you wrote a lot on how people have already stepped up to tackle issues of regional and national importance, instead of writing about why they should be incentivized to do so.</p>
<p>Verdict? 5.</p>
<p>Thanks for your input! How could I make the prose better? And is that a 5/6 or 5/12?</p>
<p>Anyone? please</p>
<p>Anyone? please</p>
<p>5/6…I guess…u r not that bad to get an 5/12…</p>
