Please grade my SAT essay ....thanks

<p>Hey.... I would really appreciate someone with knowledge of the SAT essay score process to grade my essay! Thanks a lot </p>

<p>Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.
A mistakenly cynical view of human behavior hold that people are primarily driven by selfish motives: the desire fo wealth,power, and fame. Yet history gives us many examples of individuals who have sacrificed their own welare for a cause or a principle that they regarded as more important than their own lives. Conscience - that powerful inner voice that tells us what is right and what is wrong- can be a more compelling force than money, power, or fame.
Assignment - Is conscience a more powerful motivator than money, fame, or power?</p>

<p>Humans are known to be naturally greedy and power-thirsty. In a world where people strive to live for only money and the power and fame it brings with it, it is rare to see individuals who will rise about monetary satisfaction and embrace their inner conscience. Those that fight in the war and my mother are superb examples of individuals who have lived life not for the power of being well known or having money, but for the power of knowing you made a difference in yourself and others.
America is in a war against terrorism. In a time of vulnerbility and need, many American citizens have given up their jobs, left their families and the luxuries American's have to fight in Iraq. These people are not driven by selfish motives, but are only there to help protect American and all it stands for. These brave inidivudals continue to fight even with their life at stake. These men and woman have "sacraficed their own welfare" for the ideals of freedom, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness. Their consicence has prevailed and has been a more powerful motivator then greed or other trivial luxiries that motivate so many others.
On a more personal level, I have seen conscience beat money and power in my own life. Recently, in a discussion with my mom, I asked her why she became a teacher when she was such a succsessful and powerful lawyer. She told me that while she was at first attracted to the money and fame a lawyer gets, she realized that in life, money does not by happiness, love, or respect. My mom's conscience motivated her to give up a powerful job to teach children and adoelscents. She left her high salary position so that she would be able to teach her knowledge and pratical advice to future generations. Moreover, my mother realized that teaching is more powerful or valuable than making money because without teachers, their would be no future and no knowledge.
In a world fueled by indivudals who strive for greed,power, and fame, those fighting in Iraq and my mother are two poigant examples of people who overcame the stagma that humans are naturally greedy. They have realized that listening to their innver voices is the most priceless thing they have.</p>

<p>Thanks for reading it! Sorry for any typos! In grading it, you can use the 0-6 scale or 0-12 scale. I did it in 25 mins, so dont be to critical =).. anyway, thanks again!</p>