<h2>Topic; Is using humor the best way to approach difficult situations</h2>
<p>No doubt, humor is necessary in cultivating a happier life. When it comes to serious situations and problems, it is however unacceptable. It matter-of-factly tends to trivialize the seriousness of situations, as one pokes fun at what is obviously not funny. A few examples help establish why humor may not be the best way to approach situations.</p>
<p>In the sitcom 'grey's anatomy,' there is an episode that illustrates a man who becomes obese because he has lost his job, and the world doesn't seem to make sense anymore. In checking into the hospital, the man is unnecessarily smug. He even goes as far as making fun of his obesity to humor the doctors. Senior resident doctors warn the junior residents to not make any derogatory remark to the patient. However, Dr Karev, in a bid to so to speak connect with the patient, calls him 'the elephant.' The patient is greatly distressed by this utterance and tells Karev to stay away from his room. The fact is that Dr Karev didn't intend to offend the patient. On the contrary, he makes that statement to humor the patient; nevertheless, it backfires. Had he not tried to be funny, things wouldn't have gotten so messy.</p>
<p>In his book '25 ways to smash an interview,' Bob O'Reilly recounts the story of a girl called Adison. Adison is supposed to interview for her Harvard application. She learns of her interviewer and tries to research some of the things he likes; one of which is politics. On the day of the interview, Adison expounds on some of her political ideals. To that effect, she makes fun of Margaret Thatcher. Unknown to her, her interviewer is a faithful adherent of Thatcher; she later found this out. This very much hurts her chances as evidenced by her rejection letter on admissions decision day. Interviews as we all know have a subjective nature. Adison had no intention of inciting her interviewer. Yet she lost her opportunity to impress him. In a moment of what she thought was good humor, she messed up her interview. It's not clear whether the effects of what she said about Thatcher kept her from entering Harvard, but it very well could be. Perhaps, because of that, her interview did not put in a good word for her.</p>
<p>The things we say go a long way in either making or marring us. A friend once said, 'every spoken word shall surely be accounted for.' Hence, it is expedient for one to bridle one's tongue and avoid trying to be unnecessarily humorous. Things, most definitely, would have gone differently if Dr Karev and Adison had done away with their wry humor</p>
<p>10-12? It seems like you just want confirmation from people. Believe a little more in yourself.</p>
<p>i beg to disagree. You know at times one may be blinded to see one’s flaws. Thus, a neutral eye is needed in evaluating one’s work. You gave me 10-12. Hope it works that way in oct. Thanks for taking out time to read</p>
<p>As a rule of thumb, I try to go for three examples. However, you seemed to make it work. For the concluding sentence, I’d try to generalize it farther beyond your two examples.
If I were a grader, I’d say a solid 5/6. I would be a hard grader.</p>
<p>Grey’s Anatomy isn’t much of a ‘sitcom’ and you could add some more details to the essay. Other than that, i say you’re on the right track:)</p>
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<p>Isyemky,</p>
<p>I would give this essay a 10 (or 9 if you get a harsh grader). Your examples are phenomenal, however you have quite a few written syntax errors. While the SAT essay is supposed to be a “rough draft” that only allows you to have a few (very, very few) errors and get away with it. I felt that is one major detractor. Your examples are good, however they can be developed a little more. Developing your good examples would make them great examples. The “grey’s anatomy” example is great, however you just throw the doctor’s name in randomly; to a grader who may not watch the show, he will penalize you. I think the only time you can get away with that is if you are writing about literature (for example, if you say Romeo, you really don’t need to elaborate [but I always do to play it safe]). Now I say a 9 because with these errors and the partially developed passages your score really was hindered. This really could be a 10 or even 11 if you get rid of some of those minor errors, which is very easy to do. For example when you wrote, “It matter-of-factly” the grader will be thinking “Students are alloted a small number of errors, so its OK.” However, this mistake so early on will turn off the grader and have him or her mentally giving you a lower score. If you get a pronoun in a long sentence wrong, thats an honest mistake, but a phrase like that will put the grader on the offensive. </p>
<p>Vocabulary. I see you wrote with excellent words, just make sure they’re appropriate. You never want to FORCE words. Using SAT words is necessary, however it must be done very cautiously. You don’t want to put in too little or too much; you must put in the perfect amount. I felt that this essay was approaching too much, but its ok.</p>
<p>I’m sorry if I’ve come off as negative; don’t get me wrong this is a good essay, but I see a lot of potential to get the higher (if not perfect) score. You have control over your writing, you just need to develop it a little more. Your examples are great and you have control over your language (SAT vocabulary) which is something a lot of people like, so your essay is definitely good. The length is appropriate (you filled up all the writing space on the answer key) so you’re definitely on the path to the perfect score. Keep up the great work, post some more essays up! Good luck =)!</p>
<p>~Aceventura74</p>
<p>hey, good to know i could hit the double digits with that essay given that i made up the entire thing.
I really thought i used mater-of-factly correctly lol. That was just a gamble. In Nigeria, we use colloquial English a great deal.
Do you think my punctuations and sentence structures were awful? I find it hard to punctuate correctly under the 25 mins pressure. Any tips on that?
Thanks for your insightful and encouraging remarks. it’s also ok to be a bit hard. It puts hubris on check</p>
<p>Isyemky,</p>
<p>My apologies; I was assuming you’re native language was standard spoken English (the one spoken in the US). In that case, I suggest you post more often on these forums and people will gladly help you out. </p>
<p>Do you think my punctuations and sentence structures were awful? I find it hard to punctuate correctly under the 25 mins pressure. Any tips on that?</p>
<p>I would not consider it awful at all. If you’re (in terms of unwritten law) allowed 5 mistakes without penalty in syntax for the essay, I would say you had 6 at most 7 errors, nothing terrible at all. As far as error goes in 25 minutes, your spelling is fine, and you can use my strategy, if you don’t know how to spell a word, such as occassion or occasion, just cram it in at the end of a sentence in smudged up handwriting hoping the grader won’t notice lol. Its a terrible idea, but hey, if you can’t spell, don’t spend 5 minutes on a word, give it 5 seconds and get your thoughts on the paper. I would say your essay is fine, but it can be better with small adjustments here and there. If you post up some more, I’d be glad to grade them. </p>
<p>~Aceventura74</p>
<p>lol. You got me really wrong. In Nigeria we speak ‘queens’ english; we were colonized by the British. As a matter of fact, I’ve spoken and be taught in English my whole life. i cannot even speak my native though i understand.
You need to apologise. I have excellent spelling. It’s just that i oftentimes fail to spare the commas. Been trying to get the hang of that. You said I had like 7 incorrect punctuations. Guess thats better than i thought.
Ironically, we think Americans don’t speak good enough English here in Nigeria. lol. You guys love slangs which is kinda kool. Hence, our adaptation of it. It’s almost12 midnight. I’d paste another essay probably tomorrow.</p>
<p>Isyemky,</p>
<p>While English is a lanaguge, wherever you go its different. Northeast US English vs. Midwest English vs. British English. I’m aware of colonization etc, taken various history courses in my life xD. Depending on where you come from, you grow up with a different style which definitely impacts your writing. </p>
<p>~Aceventura74</p>