Please help me with my Common App essay!

<p>Hey guys, I just finished my essay and I was hoping that some of you would read my essay and tell me what I need to fix to make it better. If you want to read it, let me know and I will PM it to you. Thanks in advance.</p>

<p>I’ll gladly take a look.</p>

<p>I’ll read and give feedback!</p>

<p>I’ll read and give you feedback. PM me :)</p>