PLEASE help me with my UC personal statement!!

<p>I need someone to give me feedbacks/correction/critics..anything on my UC personal statement. any help is greatly appreciated!</p>

<p>just post below and i'll PM u.
Thanks!</p>

<p>I will read your essay but do take note that I myself am applying this year ( I’m an international…not sure about you though) So, if you are uncomfortable and rather not send it i get it. =)</p>

<p>I will read it too broseph</p>