Please hurry! I need feedback on this UC essay ASAP!

<p>hey guys, I really need your help in critiquing this essay for the first UC prompt in describing the world that you come from. Any advice would be well received! I'm looking to submit my UC app today, so I need help fast.</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

<p>Sure i sent mine in already</p>

<p>i'll read it. :]</p>

<p>i sent mine in already, and i'd be glad to help you. pm to me!</p>

<p>jsut send me. I'll rob send it tomo or Sunday. i know. iam late. </p>

<p>Btw, BTw, do u kn0w whether UC schools accept fee-waiver for the application? Or we have to pay $70??</p>

<p>sure ill read it</p>