Please, I just need my chances of ONE school! (Emerson College!)

Chance Me / Match Me!
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<p>Hello all! I'm a Freshman in college and I will be transferring from Community College into a four-year institution this fall. I applied to four schools: Emerson College, Ithaca College, Suffolk University, and University of Rhode Island. I've already been accepted into Ithaca, Suffolk, and URI. Now, I am just waiting on my number one choice, Emerson. I figure I have another week or two before I get a decision.. and I am just dying of anticipation.. because I have absolutely no idea where I stand. Here are my credentials:</p>

<p>MAJOR: Creative Writing.</p>

<p>One Semester College GPA: 3.88 (Made Dean's List)
***In my mid-term report of my second semester, I have all A's as well, so I will finish the year with approx same GPA.</p>

<p>SAT Score: Reading 590, Math 570, Writing 550.</p>

<p>High School GPA: 2.59 (yes, I know.. I know..)</p>

<p>Extra Curricular Activities:
-Assistant Director for a Massachusetts High School Drama Guild entry.
-An Actor in three different theatre companies.
-Staff member of high school newspaper for three years; editor for one year.
-Staff member of college newspaper
-Assistant in college theatre
-Community Service (animal shelters)
-Volunteer work at Public Library
-Worked on creating, editing, and own entries in high school Literary Journal.
-Varsity Basketball in high school
-Varsity Football in high school</p>

<p>Essay: I think it's a 9/10. I started off writing about the reasons why the college shouldn't accept me (my low high school GPA, my not so great SAT scores). Then I went on to explain how I am the only one responsible for my faults. I went on to explain how I have something that none of the other applicants have: "a hunger." I explained my life story, how both my parents passed away and living with this. I explained how I have a hunger to express, a hunger to grow, and a hunger to live. I express my passions in this essay.</p>

<p>Letters of recommendation/Instructor Evaluations:
-A Rhode Island State Senator
-My high school drama director and my mentor (also an Alumnus of Emerson, very well respect)
-My college theatre professor and former Emerson teacher
-College English professor
****All four of these are glowing recommendations for me.</p>

<p>Samples of my work:
-A vivid poem I wrote about life
-A one-act play I wrote (also directed and produced it)
-A short film I wrote
*** I've gotten much feedback on all three and I've been told all three are excellent samples of work.</p>

<p>So, lay it on this guys. I could really use your opinion, whether it be positive or negative. I just need something! Thank you so much.</p>

<p>If you need any other info, I would happy to give it. IF YOU HAVE ANY QUESTIONS YOU WOULD LIKE TO ASK ME ABOUT YOUR SITUATIONS, I'D BE HAPPY TO GIVE MY THOUGHTS TOO!</p>

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<p>No one will help? :-&lt;/p>

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<p>Unfortunately your SAT’s are on the absolute bottom cusp of their range. Since you are applying for sophomore year (not junior year) they will take the scores into consideration and that will hurt you quite a bit. Your college GPA is very good though, so it really could go either way. Also, I would NOT write your essay about that. Colleges don’t want to hear you saying how bad of an applicant you are, they want to see something unique, what you would bring to the campus. Try to focus on your future, not your past. Your EC’s look good, but they look like almost all high school activities, what have you done since getting to college?</p>

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<p>First off, thank you for taking the time to reply! I know about my SATs… kind of stinks but nothing I can do about it. My own fault for not preparing enough. I guess I’ve just got to accept that and hope they see the bright spots and get accepted in spite of the poor SAT scores.</p>

<p>I think I worded the stuff about my essay wrong. I didn’t write the whole thing about why they shouldn’t accept me. The first paragraph starts off like “I think we should get all of the negative aspects out of the way right now. I do not have the most imposing high school grade-point average. My SAT scores are far from lavish. My hair is too thick to manage. These things are my fault and mine alone (besides the thick hair, that is hereditary). I take full responsibility for them. At this point in my life, I have come to realize that blaming other people for my actions is foolish. Trying to reflect blame onto someone or something else is irresponsible…” Then I spend about two pages of talking about what I bring to the table.</p>

<p>The EC’s on there that are from college are my Assistant Directing in a festival (I was an almunus helping out the company), Acting, community service, volunteering, the college newspaper. A lot of my extra curricular activities are continuations of what I did in high school, because I’m very passionate about them.</p>

<p>Again, thank you for the feedback!</p>

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<p>couple more of these bumps…</p>

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<p>bump…</p>

<p>Be kind, reply!</p>

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<p>I wouldn’t use that essay. I agree with the other posters - your essay should focus on the future, what you can bring to the table, how you can contribute to college… NOT your faults! If I were an adcom, I would be a little turned off by your first sentence. </p>

<p>You have great ECs. Could you try retaking the SATs to bump your scores up a bit? ECs + SATs could compensate for your low GPA.</p>