Please I think it's bad, what's your opinion??

<p>Hey!
I'm really not sure about this essay, some say it's ok but some say it's not good. Could you read it and tell me what you think?thanks</p>

<p>I can you give you my thoughts. I also thought mine was average. PM it over if interested.</p>

<p>I'll take a look too if you pm it to me.</p>