<p>Hi guys and gals. A senior here who is starting to write essays. I have one written and am looking for some critiques. </p>
<p>It's for the commonapp, so it's a pretty big one (in terms of importance, not really size). I chose topic of your choice and just kinda wrote about myself in a way that I thought expressed me as a person. I don't want to tell you what it's about cuz I want you to be able to gather that from the essay. In other words, I just want to see if I am making myself clear in the essay.</p>
<p>It's my first draft, so there will be grammatical errors probably. Anyway, does anybody want to help me out, please?</p>