Please Proofread and offer advice on my Essay!

[desidude2011]

<p>Someone Please Proofread my Common App Essay!
Post here and ill pm ya!</p>

[collegefan17]

<p>PM me your essay and i’ll provide feedback.</p>

[jpr4513]

<p>pm me your essay and i will edit, but if u don’t mind looking over mine</p>