PLEASE Read My Common App Essay!(Critisims, Suggestions, Any Help Welcome

<p>In need of an essay reader!! </p>

<p>Recently got inspired put a different twist on an essay I had already written!
Would love if someone could look it over!
Possibly point out unnecessary details or language improvement?</p>

<p>Critisims, Suggestions, Any Help Welcome!!!</p>

<p>Thank you so much!!!</p>

<p>also it is kind of a tear jerker but I want to make sure it still hold the integrity and purpose of my essay :)</p>