Could someone please proofread/provide feedback on my Common App essay? I wrote on the third prompt (challenging a belief). It’s already been through a couple stages of revision, but I’d really appreciate any comments from a few other readers’ perspectives.
Oh, and I’d really prefer to send my essay only to people who’ve already been through the college application process. 
If you’d be willing to read it, please PM me or comment here. Thanks so much!
I could read it
I can☺
Bump
I could read it!!
I want to read it too
I’ll read it:)
Pm it to me
^ at all posters above (and to anyone else who may be reading this):
Thanks so much for reaching out, but please, no current high school seniors – I know most of you are perfectly nice and trustworthy people, but I don’t want to run the risk of having someone come along and plagiarize my essays 
Sorry, and thanks
I’ll read it, I’m going into gap year so you’re fine