<p>Just so you don't have to look, the prompt is:
"Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum)."</p>
<p>I'm writing about my experiences volunteering at a local museum where I work with children. I love what I get to do, and I tried to convey my feelings across, but I'm afraid it sounds too sappy and that admissions officers won't take it seriously.</p>
<p>I have put a lot of time trying to cut it this way and that to get that right tone and flow, but I think I'm still not getting it.</p>
<p>Thanks in advance,
Zap</p>