Please Read my Essay :)

<p>Please read my essay and offer some feedback on it! ~I know I haven;t been using much vocab but that's something I'm working on.
THANK YOU SOSO MUCH IN ADVANCE. <3
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1.Prompt:
“The price of greatness is responsibility.”
Winston Churchill
Assignment:
Do we expect too much from our public figures? Plan your response, and then write an essay..
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Essay:
Our public figures are not only well-known, but admired and loved. However, with their fame and greatness comes great expectations from us, the public. Under their seemingly exotic outer shell and fame, they are simply ordinary people like the common man on the street. We expect too much from our public figures. This is evident in literature and everyday life.</p>

<pre><code>Even in literature, public figures are faces with expectations of being perfect. For example, in To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee, Atticus Finch is a well-known local lawyer. He has an overall good reputation, and he is a very learned man; however, one day, he chooses to defend a black man in a case against a white man. The black man is convicted of raping the white man's daughter, and even though all charges are faced towards the white man lying, the black man is proven guilty. Atticus Finch receives a lot of hatred for his decision to face someone who is unlike him, and his children also hear a lot from the citizens of their town. The citizens of his town always thought of him as someone who they could look up to, but when he defies their initial trust with something that they could not even imagine, they start degrading him. In this way, the public expects too much from their public figures.

It is also evident that public figures are faced with too many expectations in everyday life. Take our current president, Barack Obama. It is already extremely difficult to actually be president, but Obama is, arguably, president during one of the hardest times in history. He has been ruling us through a difficult recession, capture of a very dangerous terrorist, and just hard times in general. However, even though he is most likely trying his hardest in order to be a successful president, he has to always be careful because even a minor slip-up can cause citizens to stop believing in him as a success.

Public figures may be famous and admirable, but in reality, they are just everyday people like you and me. They face too much expectations in their life to be the best and flawless. Before expecting from one of these public figures, we should look at ourselves and ask, are we perfect? If not, why are we expecting from them?
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<p>Read the first sentence and didn’t really interest me. Just thought I’d let you know… I’m sure the rest is great though!</p>

<p>I would give this a 8, possibly 7.</p>

<p>Barack Obama is an example 70% of the students would use in the essay…you should really avoid using the trivial/easy examples unless you think you can present them in a way that will outshine other essays.</p>

<p>The TKAM example was a weak, as it really didn’t explain your thesis. You focused more on the public disliking him than expecting too much.</p>

<p>Lastly, I see what you are trying to do with the conclusion, but I would still recommend staying away from rhetorical questions and first person statements.</p>

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<p>StuckInTheAir, wow that guide seems really helpful! Thank you for your criticism! :)</p>

<p>no problem bud, glad you liked it.</p>

<p>*loved(:…</p>