<p>Okay.. what would you guys give this essay? (its my friends..)</p>
<p>An eight to five work day is nothing uncommon in today's bustling society. People get up, go to work, just to come home and follow the same exact routine the next day and every day following. Work "structures our time and imposes a rhythm on our lives," states Joanne B. Ciulla. People schedule their lives around their jobs, they meet new friends through their place of employment, and they get involved in new activities because of their work. Planning one's day can be tedious and grueling process. Attempting to find room for soccer practice, violin lessons, school, and time for homework is a stressful situation. However, like Cuilla has stated, through work or school, people can find more sanity in life. Knowing when work begins and ends allows a person to mold the rest of their day around it. Through workplace, people often make new social contacts.<br>
Working in an office setting provides employees with the opportunity to meet new people. People who have the ability to alter a person's daily routine and schedule. For example, if someone who has a routine of doing the same activities everyday meets someone at the office who is very sporatic with their daily plans, their person with the routine may become more sporatic while the more fly from the the seat of your pants person may gain a bit more of a routine. Along with new friends, the workplace provides a person with many new experiences.<br>
Work outings are very popular in big companies. Some may take every employee to an amusement park. Others make take their employees to a park in New York for a peaceful place to relieve them of their stress. These opportunities may not have been presented to a person unless they had a job.
Having a place of employment betters a person many people's lives in a number of ways. Work allows a person to have a structure for their life, meet new people and experience new events and enjoyment unable to be found elsewhere. As Cualla says, "It's easy to see why...having a job is so desirable in our culture." </p>
<p>It's not suppose to be detailed or in-depth, you guys have yet to understand the point of the collegeboard essay, it is just to see your ability to free write in an organized fashion with a central idea in mind. It is not a research paper where you would go in detail or in-depth. And generic?? That paper is not generic, then everyone essay that collegeboard would want would be considered "generic". I wrote a VERY similar essay on the march test, almost no grammar/puntuaction errors, very simple and direct, proving a thesis, and that's it. I received a 12. Honestly guys, the essay is not suppose to be that hard.</p>
<p>It doesn't seem very interesting and how the heck does he remember quotes like that from an author I never even heard of till I read that essay?? Are they just made up?</p>
<p>What is interesting is the quotes: they don't exactly represent what the Ms. Cuillia talks about in her books. She has problems with the work environment. The writer of the essay took the quotes out of context to suit the essay. </p>
<p>" 'Ciulla does an outstanding job of examining the meaning of work and its impact on our lives, but she is forced to admit that she has no all-encompassing solution to the dilemmas facing the modern worker. Nevertheless, she makes a persuasive case that we should think seriously about how to fit work into our lives instead of fitting our lives into our work as we search for something more.' </p>
<p>Lesson Learned- have some good quotes and you two can get a 12</p>
<p>"Lesson Learned- have some good quotes and you two can get a 12"</p>
<p>your biting sarcasm would have been more effective if you had used the word "too" as opposed to "two"</p>
<p>i don't normally correct people on grammar on forums, but if you're going to make absolutely atrocious mistakes while criticizing the way others write...</p>
<p>i understand that it doesnt have to be detailed/in-depth but.. several times she says "their" instead of "he or she"... she says stuff like "same exact" ... just a tad redundant and
"People who have the ability to alter a person's daily routine and schedule." thats not even a sentence! i could see giving her at most an 8</p>
<p>Ooppppsssiee, I made a typographical error.</p>
<p>The quotes used by the author of the aformentioned essay, when taken in context of the original author's writing, almost mean the exact opposite of the essayist's thesis. </p>
<p>So, I happened to use the wrong TOO. I stand by what I said. </p>
<p>I don't mind you feel I was sarcastic, I was. The essay was mediocre at best. I read the writings of the author quoted, and her writings do not support the way the test taker used her writing.</p>
<p>And I do believe if you have a bunch of great quotes memorized, you can make an essay better. This test taker just didn't write a very good essay. At my Ds junior high, it would have gotten a B.</p>
<p>Woah guys chill. She's right, it's mediocre, a bit boring, redundant, and there are grammar errors. And she read the book herself, did any one of you do that? I think she has a point here with using the quotes.</p>
<p>Yeah they do and it still would have been a B. </p>
<p>The essay is very repetitive- "make new friends.....new social contacts"- means the same thing</p>
<p>"Planning one's day can be tedious and grueling process. Attempting to find room for soccer practice, violin lessons, school, and time for homework is a stressful situation. However, like Cuilla has stated, through work or school, people can find more sanity in life. Knowing when work begins and ends allows a person to mold the rest of their day around it" - doesn't really make sense- either trying to fit in all those things around work is tedious and grueling or it is not because of work, it can't be both</p>
<p>"People get up, go to work, just to come home and follow the same exact routine the next day and every day following. Work "structures our time and imposes a rhythm on our lives," states Joanne B. Ciulla."- the writer starts off by using the word "just" which suggests banality and tedium, yet in the very next sentence says it is a good thing. Which is it?</p>
<p>There is more I could point out, but if you really feel this is good writing, well, use it as your standard. I would not. It is average.</p>
<p>How the heck do you remember such topic specific quotes ahead of time for a SAT test? That's ridiculous to me. This essay should be a 10 max, no way that's a 12.</p>
<p>I didn't say that this essay was good writing. There are plenty of things that I could point out as well, but I'm sure the writer would have been able to point these things out too, given a few more minutes to work. I just found a few of your comments (Lesson Learned- have some good quotes and you two can get a 12) to be a bit presumptuous.</p>
<p>It's easy to see why - aside from the income it provides - having a job is so desirable in our culture. Work works for us. It structures our time and imposes a rhythm on our lives. It gets us organized into various kinds of communities and social groups. And perhaps most important, work tells us what to do every day.</p>
<p>Adapted from Joanne B. Ciulla, The Working Life</p>