Please review my "Why Notre Dame?" essay

<p>I am applying to ND for the fall 2015 (undergrad). Could anyone critique my supplemental essay? Please PM me. Thank you! Go Irish! </p>

<p>I’ve already been accepted so I can look it over. </p>

<p>i can look it over and edit too!</p>

<p>@hwhat318‌ could you also read my essay as well?</p>

<p>I can look at it if you want!</p>

<p>@wldb15‌ sure, just pm it to me</p>

<p>@wldb15 You can pm it to me as well if you like. I applied RD and obviously have not been accepted yet. However, I want you to know I spent about two months on all three supplemental essays. Mine were critiqued heavily and articulated carefully. Not to brag, but I know what they are looking for. I am sure your essay is great. I can review it for you and give some feedback. </p>