<p>Suleyman, I would just take the criticism. At least ACTTester highlighted some weaknesses to improve upon.</p>
<p>But… In before benhpark :P</p>
<p>SatTooEasy,
it’s better to correct your nick name. first go and learn present simple tense and then score my essay. [SAT is too easy]. Your score is nothing because you are nothing.
ACTTester,
Post your essay mrs.haughty, we will see what u can do. Oh, sorry mr.haughty, I thought you are a girl.
MrWheezy,
There is no critism. It’s abrasive and arrogance forms of insulting from someone’s alias.</p>
<p>^How long did it take you to look up those words on the thesaurus?</p>
<p>Everyone’s getting ■■■■■■■ haha.</p>
<p>The fact that he’s an international still struggling to raise his SAT score above a 1700 is indicative of how is future is going to play out. No U.S. schools for you, Suleyman95! It’s best for you to invest your efforts into Constantinople University or wherever you are from.</p>
<p>IT’S OVER 9000!!!</p>
<p>you’ve been rick rolled <<<<>>>>>>>
this is the day that you will always remember as a day that you almost caught captain Jack Sparrow</p>
<p>sorry for being random guys …just wanted to end this topic…</p>
<p>R.I.P. don’t post anything;let it die.</p>
<p>Suley is haughty himself… when I asked him the questions “Why didn’t you put more effort into learning English in elementary school?” or “Why didn’t you read books in English or immerse yourself in English culture since you’ve been planning to move to the US for so long?”, I got excuses at best, sometimes nothing.</p>
<p>Ok look Suleywoman95, I’m just going to end up by saying that your essay is no more than a 3-4/12. If you think it’s higher than that, then you’re delusional.</p>
<p>Idk why this cat is judging me from my name for this site? My username shouldn’t have anything to do with my intelligence especially because I PURPOSELY made it like that so that it can be short and concise. Seriously, who the hell does this kid think he is -_-;;</p>
<p>Maybe this essay would be better. It’s another one:</p>
<p>Success of community depen upon people’s willingness to limit their personal interests. Several examples from literature and social science proofs that people should forget about their personal benefit.</p>
<p>In book “Community success” written by Russian immigrant in nineteenth century, author explains conditions to succseed in community. According to his views, first major rule is desire. People must abridge their personal interests and creaty desire to “win the race”. This book involves a couple of examples- one of them is- football(or any other sport) team. He claims that if every football player will try to hit the goal- team will lose, but if players will have “team feeling” they will win. Therefore, to have success in team -or any other group- people must limit or eliminate their personal interests.</p>
<p>As demonstrated by Jo Li Kim’s reaserch, Singapure is example of successful community(nation). He decribes development of this country from 3rd to 1st world. A group of patriots, people who love their hometown, organized “intellectual reolution”. This group of several patriots raised up Singapure “from nothing” to “everything”. His research was impressive, especially one part of it, "People with pigs and sheeps were settling down in high-tech buildings. Hence, we can see that a small group of people [succseeded] because of limiting and abridging their personal benefits. If they won’t do it, Singapure would stay in 3rd world. </p>
<p>After a careful analisis of Russian immigrant’s book about success of community(team) and Jo Li Kim’s Singapure research one can see that people must limit their personal interests, in a name, of community’s success.</p>
<p>^ What is the prompt?</p>
<p>Does success of community(group, team, nation) depen upon peoples’ willingness to limit their personal interests.</p>
<p>I would say this one is better than the last. While the grammar still isn’t near perfect, it’s much more coherent than the last one. Plus, the examples actually relate to the prompt. The main problem is still the length of the essay though; it’s still too short to get a high score. Try to put 3 examples into each essay and put a bit more detail into each paragraph. I would give this essay a 5/12.</p>
<p>^
Thanks. I wanted to write 3rd but time was running out.</p>
<p>I agree with ACTtester, it would be 5/12, maybe 6. You have had a lot of improvement; however, which is commendable. So keep working hard and you’ll get to a high score!</p>
<p>^
Thanks. In */6 scale, it’s 3/6, not 2/6.</p>
<p>^That prompt does not seem like an SAT essay prompt, i.e. there is no room for debatability; are you sure you copied it right?</p>
<p>Regardless, if you can get pass the copious mechanical errors, non-existent grammar, and weak quality of writing, your examples are coherent with the thesis of your essay. Still, it takes many rereadings to comprehend your argument. My vote is for a 2/6.</p>
<p>Please stop using “As demonstrated by [previous examples], [my position] is true” as your conclusion. It’s actually better if you don’t mention the examples at all, but expand your position to a more worldly one. Like a generalized repetition of your thesis. Finish with a deep statement.</p>
<p>^^ Nope, I’ve seen that prompt before. It is an SAT prompt.</p>
<p>This one is definitely better. </p>
<p>Few points:</p>
<p>-Try to make it longer
- Some spelling mistakes
-Try to remember to use the article “the”. I.E “In the book” rather than “In book”. My grandad was Russian and I guess in Russian they don’t use an article, so he would constantly forget. Maybe the same goes for Azerbaijan(ese?). Plus you say you here Russian every day.</p>
<p>I give it a 6.</p>
<p>Make it longer, fix the spelling, and remember the article.</p>