Pleaze Proof Read This For Me!:p

this is for common app acitivity thingy thanx

If someone asked me what is the single most important activity and why, for me, Track & Field is it. It teaches me a meaning of responsibility as a team captain, a confidence as a league champion. What is more, Track gives me a chance to go beyond myself, and also a moment to breath. In terms of winning, Track is very straightforward because if I run faster and jump further than others, the trophy is mine. I love Track because it is always fascinating to see how I can reach beyond who I am every time. Also whenever I am up on the Track field, I can just let myself be free from everything and only focus on something that I feel extremely enjoyable. Through Track, I learned how to engage myself in other activities as well, not only to do my best to reach beyond my limits but also to believe that human natures are capable of anything and so am I.

<p>heres the best i could do </p>

<p>If someone asked me what is the single most important activity and why, for me, <em>its</em> Track & Field . It teaches me * the * meaning of responsibility as a team captain, <em>the</em> confidence as a league champion. EDIT THIS * What is more* ( further more ) , Track <em>not only *gives me a chance to go beyond myself, and also a moment to *breathe</em>. In terms of winning, Track is very straightforward because if I run faster and jump further than others, the trophy is mine. I love Track because it is always fascinating to see how I can reach beyond who I am every time. Also whenever I am up on the Track field, I can just let myself be free from everything and only focus on something that I feel extremely enjoyable. Through Track, I learned how to engage myself in other activities as well, not only to do my best to reach beyond my limits but also to believe that human natures are capable of anything and so am I.</p>

<p>and oh yeah your welcome ^_^</p>

<p>There is an s in "please" dude and "proofread" is one word. OOOHHHH, you meant the essay.</p>

<p>"If someone asked me what is the single most important activity and why, for me, Track & Field is it." Is this the question?? Its redundant to restate the question. Just start by saying "track and field teaches me.....", atleast thats what people have told me about my short answers, hope it helps</p>

<p>I'll proofread grammar only, though there's some repetition as English stated.</p>

<p>If someone asked me what is the single most important activity and why, it is Track & Field. It teaches me the meaning of responsibility as a team captain, giving me confidence as a league champion. Additionally, Track allows me to go beyond myself ((, and also a moment to breath. [what?])) In terms of winning, Track is very straightforward because if I run faster and jump farther than others, the trophy is mine. I love Track because it is always fascinating to see how I can reach beyond who I am every time. (<repetitive-beyond yourself already mentioned). Also whenever I am at the field, I can just let myself be free from everything and only focus on something that is enjoyable. Through Track, I learned how to engage myself in other activities as well, not only to do my best BUT to reach beyond my limits but also to believe that humans, including myself, are capable of anything.</p>

<p>Lots of repetition going on, especially about how you go beyond.</p>

<p>Try and be more straightforward, I couldn't really understand some of the things you were saying. "I believe that human natures" for example. </p>

<p>wait, i just realized i read one of the revised versions. Your original one is pretty hard to understand, maybe you should sort of rewrite it.</p>

<p>Read it to yourself.</p>

<p>Oh, and someone DID ask you what your most important activity is/was, so don't bother restating it.</p>

<p>If someone asked me "what is the single most important activity and why?" I'd have to say Track & Field is it. As a team captain, it teaches me the meaning of responsibility and builds my confidence as a league champion. What is more, Track gives me a chance not only to go beyond myself, but also provides a moment to breath. In terms of winning, Track is very straightforward. If I run faster and jump further than others, the trophy is mine. Track always fascinates by its ability to make me reach beyond who I am every time. Also, whenever I am up on the running track, I can just free myself from everything and only focus on something that I truly enjoy. Dedication to Track has taught me how to fully engage myself in other activities as well, not only striving to reach beyond my limits but also believing that human nature is capable of anything and so am I.</p>

<p>omg..Thank you so much!!!:):)</p>

<p>'Human nature' really doesn't sound right..? shouldn't it be humans are capable?</p>

<p>your probably right, but in my edit I wanted to leave the meat of his essay</p>