PLEEASEE read my SHORT UC ESSAY??

<p>Hey guys,
I'd really appreciate it if I could get advice and editting for my second prompt for UCs..its around 4 paragraphs. </p>

<p>sorry, no '08 highschool seniors....let me know if anything seems illogical in the rough draft.. thanks! (post here if interested)</p>

<p>id be happy to read it</p>