Plz rate my Sat essay

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<p>Note: I wrote this in 25 mins according to the Sat rules,so i did not revise it,but i got to find one spelling mistake,plz rate it.
Topic: Does everyone see everything from the same prespective?</p>

<p>Does everyone see everything from the same perspective? This question drove many people crazy? Today, after I made many researches, I finally found the that answer for that question. Which is no.</p>

<p>I found this question while reading the newspaper beside the caf</p>

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<p>Why did you write this as if you viewed all these events as they happened and then wrote about it? I personally feel it would be more beneficial to write it as if you are sitting in a room taking a standardized test and are given an essay to write.</p>

<p>I think each of the examples you describe should be separate paragraphs. You also, currently, describe each example with very little detail. You need to put meat behind each example. You need to give examples of the underlying factors that are causing the people to not see eye to eye. Rather that just say the mother and daughter are fighting about whether the daughter can go to a party, you need to also show that this difference in perspective is possibly because of a variety of factors, such as age and experience differences as well as differences in motives (daughter’s motive is to go to a party while the mother’s motive is to keep the daughter safe). You should do this for all your examples, all in separate paragraphs.</p>

<p>You introduction and conclusion are fairly weak as well. You need to form an intro that states what you are going to be talking about, with a clear, developed thesis (Ex. Not everyone sees everything from the same perspective because of a number of different factors, such as age, experience, upbringing, motives, etc.) As well as the intro, your conclusion needs to be beefed up too.</p>

<p>Try to elevate your diction throughout your essay to increase your chances of scoring higher.</p>

<p>Overall, this essay in it’s current state is far from perfect. If I were to score it, I would give it a 4/12. Keep practicing!</p>

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<p>Thanks for explainin to me</p>

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<p>yeah it worths a 4-5/12</p>

<p>please score my essay :slight_smile:
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