<p>i would like to read it!</p>
<p>Wow. I really liked it. Like for real, it blows mine out of the water.</p>
<p>The only problem is that you mentioned that you weren’t listening to someone who was talking to you. That might make you come across as rude if the person reading it is like super exclusive.</p>
<p>Wow thanks! Yeah im still working out some kinks, but thats the basic essay for it. Im glad you liked it :)</p>
<p>Wow! Really, really good!! I think it’s OK that you mentioned you weren’t listening. It’s realistic. It’s OK to show your “warts.” It wouldn’t be as believable if you came across as too perfect. The not listening sets up your story about the epiphany you experience in your mind.</p>
<p>Hmm thanks!! Im excited that people like it! I still have some time to perfect it too which is awesome. I have kind of a low GPA, but high SATs for the schools im applying for, so im hoping to write good essays to get in :)</p>
<p>PM me!
if you want me to look at it</p>
<p>Actually, i posted it, its on page three if anyone wants to read it!</p>
<p>sure pm it over…</p>
<p>Haha i posted it silly people!!</p>
<p>ill take a look</p>
<p>wow that is pretty good, one of the best essays I have ever read!</p>
<p>you need to avoid slightly arrogant statements like “oh-so-polluted air” and “pointless bickering” and when you use the word “genius” to describe your state of mind. Also, cut the word “fragile” towards the end, as well as “and not relent”</p>
<p>Could you pm that to me? Thanks! =)</p>
<p>Haha i posted it on page three!</p>
<p>wow your essay is awesome. it was relevant, interesting, possibly everything you could pretty much want in an entrance essay. very good. even though i write my butt off everyday for the fun of it (me=online novelist), i dont think i match the standard of writing you just displayed there. i think i noticed an error or two but w/e. i hope you get in. i have a low gpa, and i’m 100% certain its lower than you can imagine=/ but i’m just trying to score as high as possible on the sat and act and make my essay the best.</p>
<p>Wow im the same, low GPA very high SAT, trying to balance it out with essays!</p>
<p>I’d like a read: PM it
Haha, you’re my second post.
I’ve been on this site for a year now, but never needed to post.</p>
<p>I’ll read…</p>
<p>Sure, I’d love to steal, I mean read your essay. lol</p>
<p>I have a different take.</p>
<p>I can’t figure out how this student opened your eyes to anything. His question was just like everyone else’s question…and you answered it in your head which is the point of the essay. It’s nice that you are into math, and I think the essay shows that…but I wish you would come around and talk about something you learned about this student in return. I was actually expecting something about cultural differences which would have been neat.</p>