<p>Hi my name is Victor Chen,</p>
<p>I have a few questions about my essay.</p>
<p>1) Its too long (929 words). How should i cut down the length/ where should it be reduced?</p>
<p>2) Is there enough insight? Other essays I've read have more so do I have enough?</p>
<p>3) What else can I improve? (vocabulary, syntax, etc)</p>
<p>Post here and I'll send the essay to you.</p>
<p>Thanks!</p>