puhhhleeeeeez help!?

<p>HEY! i have to write an essay, well not really an essay i have to answer these following questions for a school im applying to MSMS.. can you guys help me with this one puhhleez. Help me proofread and make it better because it sucks lol..
Heres the question
DESCRIBE YOURSELF- What sort of person are you? tell us things that are most important to you and why. What led you to this school? Do you feel you have any difficulty being away from home? Are you prepared to be in more difficult classes and have more ho mework than you are probably accustomed to? Include anything else you feel the selection commitees should know about you.
Heres what i have so far
I am a hardworking, motivated and a nice person. Some things that are important to me are my education, my family and my friends. the need to pursue more variety of classes and more oppurtunities led me to msms. I have no problem living away from home because i love to travel. I am definitly prepared to be in more difficult classes and to have more homework because i want to be challenged academically. I am willing to work hard and help MSMS in any way I can. Attending MSMS will be a great privilege to me and i will try my best to fullfil all the goals i have wanted to academically at MSMS</p>

<p>I know it sounds cheezy but can u guys help me out on it like give me some stuff to make it better or correcting it?
THANKS</p>

<p>ANYBODY!!! please help me!</p>

<p>How old are you/What grade are you going into?</p>

<p>Suggestions:
-Try not to use the word "nice" to describe you. It’s cliched. Pick something more descriptive.
-Vary your sentence structure more. Don't start every sentence with "I."
-If you have space, give examples.
-Try and be creative the way you write this essay. Maybe open up with a quick story that describes who you are.</p>

<p>Good luck!</p>

<p>"Nice" is too cliche. Get a thesaurus.</p>

<p>Now, if you'll excuse me, I have to write an essay on Huck Finn(the book) and Huck Finn (the character)'s moral choices as a major theme in the book.</p>

<p>thanks BUMP!</p>