Question about scholarship essay, and need readers

<p>pm me if you can comment on my essay.</p>

<p>but heres the prompt:</p>

<p>The students can be distinguished from other students who may have equally high academic results by virtue of their breadth of interest, creativity, intellectual energy, and involvement of the life of their community and school.</p>

<p>Write a letter of reference to yourself in THE THIRD PERSON describing how the applicant meets these criteria. It should refer to specific achievements and experiences, and may also comment on any weaknesses the candidate may display.</p>

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<p>my main dillema with my essay is to whether focus on many examples of my 2 main passions/EC's, or to focus on one example for each main EC, and then elaborate on it.</p>

<p>bump up thx!</p>

<p>I love reading essays!</p>

<p>alright, i'll send it over when i got time</p>

<p>oooh, I hate when I have to write those "brag" scholarship essays. PM it over to me, too.</p>

<p>i'll read it! :-)</p>