<p>Hey guys,
I was taking a 2007 PSAT and couldn't understand why I got a question wrong on the Writing section.
The question is the error ID part.
Here it is; the items in parentheses are answer choices.</p>
<p>In his new book, Quest for Adventure, the (renowned) British mountaineer Chris Bonington examines the (past century's) most remarkable expeditions, (profiling) such explorers (including) Neil Armstrong, Thor Heyerdahl, and Maurice Herzog. (No error)</p>
<p>I chose no error, but now that I read over it, I notice that the construction of "such explorers including" does sound weird.
And that happens to be the correct answer.
But can someone help me understand why, in a grammatical sense? And how could you go about correcting the sentence? I would think that "profiling such explorers like Neil Armstrong...." would be a viable option, right?</p>
<p>Thanks!</p>
<p>The participle “including” is improperly used (instead of the conjunction “as”) as a correlative of “such.”
^^ this is the CB explanation for the question (from a 2009 test with the same question)</p>
<p>Corrected sentence --> “In his new book, Quest for Adventure, the renowned British mountaineer Chris Bonington examines the past century’s most remarkable expeditions, profiling such explorers as Neil Armstrong, Thor Heyerdahl, and Maurice Herzog.”</p>
<p>Hope this helps!</p>
<p>The above explanation is excellent, and I’d also like to add that these type of idioms appear very frequently on the test.</p>
<p>@psithurisma: Yes, that’s exactly the type of explanation that I was hoping for. Thank you very much!
@theskittebug: After a rather depressing encounter with a practice test, I too realize that idioms are worth the time they take to study (although I’m incredibly frustrated at CollegeBoard for testing us on useless applications that DON’T EVEN LOGICALLY but rather arbitrarily make sense). </p>