Quite an odd personal statement... Critiques?

College Essays
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<p>I need some opinions on whether it "conveys my personality" and if it seems fairly good structurally...</p>

<p>Heck... Just tell me if its even on the right track - I think it is - But I really have never done this before...</p>

<p>I need to cut around 130 words from it so any advice for that would be good too...</p>

<p>Thanks</p>

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<p>send it to me ;) <a href="mailto:tyac.sg@gmail.com">tyac.sg@gmail.com</a></p>

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<p>i got you...</p>

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<p>PM it to me!</p>

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<p>ill glad to read it!! toss it over ;)</p>

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<p>i will read it.</p>

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<p>I could have a look!</p>

<p><a href="mailto:markopolovich@gmail.com">markopolovich@gmail.com</a> , thanks!</p>

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<p>I'll read it--PM me.</p>

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<p>I'll read and critique your essay if you PM it to me.</p>