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<p>Prompt:
"Whatever happened to good manners? Many books and articles have been written about the lack of common courtesy and old-fashioned politeness in today's society. From spoiled children acting out in restaurants to so-called experts yelling at each other on cable news shows, people seem less concerned with good manners and civilized behavior than ever before. On the other hand, if people really want to change the world for the better, they have to risk being seen as impolite or uncivil."</p>

<p>As the world enters a new era, “old-fashioned” politeness is certainly lost in the tides of progressive change. It is important to note however, that such politeness was never a hindrance to those who desired changed for the better. Thus, although a progressive and free movement may increase social tolerance of informalities in the past, it has become apparent through history that the maintenance of civilities is actually beneficial to those who attempt change.</p>

<p>Change is characterized by a singular entity that can encompass a large body of followers. Although some reformists may take a radical route in pursuit of their goals, the most successful reformers have maintained their civility and convinced others of their cause through of projection of sentiment, rather than a blatant alienation of the opposition. Examples of successful include Martin Luther King and Gandhi; both of them implemented change through the strength of social civility and sympathy rather than the discourse of blatant hate. By studying their actions, reformers of the present have been able to do great things without the risk of being seen as impolite or civil.</p>

<p>The power of empathy is enough for change alone. There is rarely ever an occurrence where change has succeeded without diplomacy and civility, let alone an occurrence that hasn’t required such. Ultimately, though I am a strong supporter of freedom of thought and speech, an analysis of the past has proven that a loss of courtesy is unnecessary in the face of oppression.
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<p>Length 1.5 pages (some wiggle room there obviously)</p>

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