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assignment:should heroes be defined as the people who say something when we ourselves lack to courage to say?

There are many types of heroes. Not just the one who brave physical danger but those who brave social injustice. I consider the people who stand up for themselves in the face of injustice to be the bravest of them all. It is not easy you see, to champion an idea when you are faced with hundreds of difficulties. The people who have the courage to speak up for themselves and others should be considered to be heroes.

There have been many people throughout history who have stood up against injustice. Martin Luther King’s speeches are remembered by all the people in the world. He spoke about the common problems that every African American faced each and every day. He brought out all these problems to the national level and thus started to catalyse the greatest civil rights movement to world has ever seen. We can see that the only heroes are not the ones with the large muscles and the big guns, but rather people who stood up and spoke against injustice.

Raja Ram Mohan Roy was one of the greatest freedom fighter India has ever know. He put an end to some of the heinous traditions which took place throughout the country. He alone stood up against these social practices and spoke up against them on a social forum. Putting an end to a practice known as ‘sati’. These are the real heroes not someone like batman or superman.

Humans are built for survival this meant fighting off animals and other humans. This meant that the strongest were considered to be the most powerful and termed as ‘heroes’. But in today’s world the power is speech is much greater that the power of muscle. A tyrant can be toppled from his throne by just the collective power of people standing up against him. The people who bring social change are the one who are our real heroes because without them tyrants would rule the world.

We sometimes need to stand up for not just ourselves but also for all the people facing the same injustice. All leaders throughout history have done this, Mahatma Gandhi, Martin Luther King and Raja Ram Mohan Roy. These are our real heroes they don’t just fight for themselves but fight for a greater change in our current system.

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anyone?

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Not just the one who brave physical danger but those who brave social injustice.
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It is not easy you see, to champion an idea when you are faced with hundreds of difficulties.
*easy, you see,

to world has ever seen
*the

Martin Luther King didn’t just talk. Put details in your examples or we won’t believe that you know what you’re talking about.

freedom fighter India has ever know
*fighters, *known

He put an end to some of the heinous traditions which took place throughout the country.
Like what?? EXPLAIN.

Putting an end to a practice known as ‘sati’.
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These are the real heroes not someone like batman or superman.
*heroes,
*Batman
*Superman
This is silly. Nobody’s arguing that fictional characters are the “real heroes.”

Humans are built for survival this meant fighting off animals and other humans.
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This meant that the strongest were considered to be the most powerful and termed as ‘heroes’.
Proof? Is this supposed to be your third example? There’s no example here; you’re just making vague claims.

the power is speech is much greater that the power of muscle.
*of speech
Proof? Power of muscle is still pretty dang big. Are wars fought with speech?

are the one who are
*ones

because without them tyrants would rule the world.
This is a baseless claim you have not attempted to support.

All leaders throughout history have done this, Mahatma Gandhi, Martin Luther King and Raja Ram Mohan Roy.
*done this:
Who said anything about Gandhi? Did you forget to talk about him before?

These are our real heroes they don’t just fight for themselves but fight for a greater change in our current system.
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The grammar here is bad, and you don’t explain your examples enough. It sounds like you don’t know enough about them to be able to use them, to be honest. What did RRMR actually DO? According to you, he spoke sometimes about some bad practices. What practices? How did it help? What did he do besides speaking?