Read college essay please! Subject too touchy?

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<p>I really could use someone to look over my college essay. I decided to write about the death of my brother (in 3rd person) and I'm hoping it's not "too touchy" of a subject. I also am wondering if what I did is even appropriate for a college essay or not. I really don't want to ask any of my teachers because I don't wanna make things awkward with them, and I'll probably ask my guidance counselor to read it tomorrow but I figured some people here could help too.</p>

<p>Basically I just wanna know if it's okay, if it's too personal, and what I should change. Feel free to critique as harshly as you want, or even say if I it'd be better to change my topic. If it means anything, my #1 school is UConn. Leave your name here I guess and i'll PM you my essay, thanks.</p>

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<p>I would love to read it and provide feedback. :)</p>

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<p>sent, thank you</p>

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<p>I’ll read it-- I tried to write on the death of my father and not sure I did very well… but this was years ago. I’ve dealt with so much death in my family, I still read and ponder it… so I might be a good resource.</p>

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<p>sent, thanks.</p>

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<p>I’d question, especially given the topic, why you’d write it in 3rd person.</p>

<p>And remember, this essay is supposed to be about You, so only if you can be using his death as a natural vehicle for that.</p>