Read/Crtique my Application Essay?

This is an application for ApplyTexas.

This is an application for ApplyTexas. Topic: Describe a circumstance, obstacle or conflict in your life, and the skills and resources you used to resolve it. Did
it change you? If so, how?

Please comment or message me if you’d like to help :slight_smile:

Is there something I’m missing? Where can I help? :-?

I’d rather not post the essay in a public forum, so anyone who would like to read and help out please comment or message me and I’ll show you the essay :slight_smile: