Read my Chicago Transfer essay

Transfer Students
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<p>[I wasn't getting much luck in the UChicago forum so I thought I would try here]</p>

<p>So I'm finishing up my second draft of my "What do pictures want" essay and I got some pretty good comments from an alumnus who read over it and offered some quality advice. I'm hoping to get some volunteers who would like to read my essay and offer comments ESPECIALLY if they are good with grammar/syntax because I'm pretty bad at it.</p>

<p>Before you read it I just want to point out that It's probably not very "Chicago-y" I really hate the idea that many applicants seem to have on here that your essays have to read a certain way to be considered worthy of UC and have tried to worry more about my essay showing ME than being "Chicago-y".</p>

<p>None of the ideas presented in the essay are particularly new, which is intentional, I was worried far more about showing who I am than trying to fit some mold or reinvent the wheel.</p>

<p>Be as callous or sensitive as you want; I know my essay probably isn't going to be the best one the Adcom's will read this year but it certainly isn't going to be the worst either. Believe me, I can handle harsh criticism as long as it's well-intentioned.</p>

<p>Ok, now that I'm done apologizing(lol) for an essay you haven't even read let me just thank anyone who offers to read it and offer comments. Please either pm me your e-mail or reply with it in this thread.</p>

<p>Also: please don't ask for my essay if you're applying for transfer to Uchicago this year, I think the reason for this should be self-explanatory.</p>

<p>Thanks again!</p>

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<p>I am also applying for UChicago so I won't ask for your essay :)...</p>

<p>but am curious to know your stats? where are you now? what major do you intend to pursue at uchicago?</p>

<p>is it your top choice?</p>

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<p>My stats are in the '08 applicant thread a page or two back if you want to look. My hs numbers are really average but I've done really well at college and I'm hoping that will offset it some. </p>

<p>I'm planning on majoring in History, and yes, even though it's a long shot I remain optimistic and it's my top choice.</p>

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<p>send it to me, im applying to notre dame so its not even on the same topic, but at least it would give me an idea of where the other applicants are at compared to mine, you know what i mean/></p>

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<p>Yup. Will be glad to read it. I'm not a transfer applicant :D So no worries.</p>

<p>I was one though last year haha.</p>

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<p>I may not be the best to give you new ideas but i can help you check for grammatical (and such) errors if you like. I am not applying to UC since they don't have FA for intls.</p>

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<p>I'd love to read. I'm applying to BU, BC, Tufts and Northeastern and I've already done my essay.</p>

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<p>I'll read it if u dont mind because I'm going to have to be writing this next year !</p>

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<p>Can I read it? Thanks</p>

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<p>Sorry guys I'm not going to be able to send it to any more people; although I really appreciate all the responses and everything I need to be cautious so that this essay doesn't get into the hands of too many people where it may end up being reused or something. </p>

<p>Again, I really appreciate everyone's help!!</p>