Read my common app essay for Ivies?

College Essays
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<p>I've completely re-written my common app essay today and am fairly pleased with what I've managed to come up with, but I'm not overly thrilled. I still feel as if something is...missing, and I'd like some advice as to what. I would really appreciate advice from anyone who would like to offer it. Thanks!! :D</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look :]</p>

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<p>Thanks, PM’d you!</p>

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<p>I can read for you as well. :)</p>

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<p>I’ll read it, ive already submitted my apps so no worries of plagarism</p>

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<p>Same here- pm me!</p>

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<p>I’ll give you feedback! I already applied to all my schools and none of them are ivies.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it</p>

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<p>I can read it :)</p>

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<p>I’ll be glad to read it</p>

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<p>Im no expert, but glad to help.</p>

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<p>I can read. Could you help me with mine too? :)</p>

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<p>I can read, if you would like.</p>

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<p>I can read it.My cousin is in Stanford… may be he can give you some suggestions.</p>

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<p>ill read it, pm me</p>

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<p>I could also give some feedback! PM me</p>