Read my common app short answer?

[rishay95]

<p>Hey,
If anyone could read my common app short answer and critique it, i'd really appreciate it. I won't post it online, but if you could just reply, i'll send it to you!
Thanks!</p>

[hopingforbetter]

<p>I’d love to…</p>

[elnamo]

<p>I’ll read it too!</p>

[rishay95]

<p>Thanks i’ll send them now!</p>