Read my CommonApp Essay?

[ohsochristine]

<p>i need proofreading, can someone read it? i'll pm it over</p>

[Raichu]

<p>Ill read / criticize it.</p>

<p>Sent from my SGH-T959V using CC App</p>

[dkdtxs]

<p>I can check flow , if you PM me</p>

[hgsoloco]

<p>pm me and i’ll take a look. thanks</p>