Read my CommonApp Essay?

<p>Hey guys I would just like some feedback on the CommonApp essay I wrote.
The Prompt is: Recount a time you experienced failure, how did it affect you, and what did you learn?
My essay currently has 712 words of the 650 required, i would like someone's feedback and suggestions along with things I could possibly cut out in order to meet the length requirement. Thank you to all that help. </p>