<p>If you're in college or an adult I would love to have you critique my essay. Right now its around 700 words so I'd like to get that down a bit and just clean it up overall. Any criticism is greatly appreciated! Reply and I'll pm it to you.</p>
<p>This should be located in the “College Essays” forum. Also, I’d advise against sending your personal essay to strangers over the internet. Have a teacher, real life friend, sibling, or parent read it and give you and honest critique. They’re the ones who know you best - therefore they’ll be the best judges of whether or not your essay sounds like your own voice.</p>