Read my essay and tell me if it's really cliche?

<p>I've been working on my Common App essay, and I'm having a lot of trouble with topic ideas...I finally wrote a first draft, and I just kind of need some one to tell me if the idea has potential, or if it's too cliche and I should just totally start over.
I feel like the fact that it's shorter than most of the essays I write isn't helping, but I'm really not so sure about the whole idea right now...
Thanks!</p>