Read my essay please someone?

<p>I am applying to Villanova, UOP, USC, Case, Marquette, Couple of UC's, and Drake. It's personal experience (how my life changed through immigration) so I wouldn't worry about anyone stealing. Some people already gave comments about it, and they said idea was good, but it needs some work as in style, etc. Would anyone willing to take a look?</p>

<p>Hi there!</p>

<p>I currently work in my university's admission department. Although I don't have a say in the admission decision, I know how they operate and could give you an honest opinion if your essay works or not. I wouldn't mind reading it and proofing it either. Please email it to <a href="mailto:marc.d.tan@gmail.com">marc.d.tan@gmail.com</a>. I look forward to reading your essay!</p>

<p>Send me a PM.</p>

<p>PM me and I'll take a look at it if you want.</p>

<p>PM me, I'll give it a look; I just finished my own.</p>