<p>i've never posted here before, only i read your essay and then i read the criticisms and felt obligated to write something in response</p>
<p>i think sometimes, you need to stop asking other people what they think of you work and just go with it. </p>
<p>like you said-- you're too unique for all this catering to ad coms. at the end of the day, you're going to put yourself forward to colleges, and if they don't like that, you don't belong there. it doesn't matter what they're expecting, or what other people think you should do, and i realize you've probably heard this all already, but you are, maybe, too unique keep asking these grammar-loving, ad-com pleasing people (who-- i admit, will probably get into an amazing college) for help</p>
<p>bernard shaw has said that "The reasonable man adapts himself to the world; the unreasonable one persists in trying to adapt the world to himself. Therefore, all progress depends on the unreasonable man."</p>
<p>go for it. i liked your essay. it was quirky and funny. i laughed. some details need fixing. your thesis isn't very clear. you contradict yourself by saying you're quirky and then you're normal, that's true, but if that's how you feel: explain it. i think you mean that you're normal in the sense that there are a lot of unique kids being pushed around by overly conformist english teachers, and you want to help them out. if you want to say that, say it. </p>
<p>fix your diction. some things could be clarified. i also think that your egoism speaks for itself: you don't need to (literally or metaphorically) beat them over the head with it. otherwise, it's quite nice. fix the flow, maybe, a little. but those things are all details. </p>
<p>The only thing I want to add was not about the OP at all. The quick shot about "..a little arrogant" I don't see it that way at all. MaryCeleste made excellent suggestions and did so politely and "Vintor" blasted her for arrogance ? I think there's arrogance in giving a bone-head, quick answer, unless "Vintor" was referring to OP and the subject matter.</p>
<p>"Thats the problem with English teachers, or at least the caffeine-addicted proud grandmothers of three that I had to listen to through high school. "</p>
<p>I hope you didn't ask one of those sorry creatures to write your recommendations. That combined with your essay could have the adcoms thinking you are a hypocrite.</p>
<p>RE: Bernard Shaw's usage of unreasonable man, he means the uncommon thinker. But even revolutionary thinkers must be well-grounded in society's methods before he proposes to change it.
And we are talking about English teachers, not creative writing with
due repect.</p>
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"Thats the problem with English teachers, or at least the caffeine-addicted proud grandmothers of three that I had to listen to through high school. "</p>
<p>I hope you didn't ask one of those sorry creatures to write your recommendations. That combined with your essay could have the adcoms thinking you are a hypocrite.
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<p>Nope. I'm not applying to any schools that require subjective and skewed reccomendations.</p>
<p>Your essay is ****. Please tell me this is a joke.</p>
<p>The entire first paragraph has nothing to do with the question and you spend 3 paragraphs talking about "cool stories".</p>
<p>"Radness"? Do I even need to comment?</p>
<p>The little relevance your essay does possess, it doesn't answer why you want to be a teacher, rather it states why you SHOULD be a teacher, which is a misinterpretation of the essay.</p>
<p>It's way too off-topic to be considered seriously at a college. I hope that you either have an epiphany about how to be a good teacher or you consider another career. You only discuss why teachers now suck, and why you should be a teacher, neither which has nothing to do with why you want to become a teacher. Do you have a passion for learning from students? Do you enjoy passing on new knowledge? Do you like kids? Are you devoted? None of these are shown in your essay.</p>
<p>If this essay is an 100% accurate predictor of how you will teach, I hope my children don't go to whatever school you're teaching at.</p>
<p>imiracle911...fix the html tags they are bugging me lol.</p>
<p>As for the essay, I frankly thought that the only good aspect of it was that it conveyed personality. However, the personality it conveys is far from desirable for a college environment. I think this essay deserves a good rewrite incorporating more qualities of your personality that would make you a good teacher. Ok, so a rewrite may sacrifice some of your uniqueness and individuality, and being yourself is great. But would you rather make some edits and sacrifice your individuality or keep your essay like this and face a mailbox of rejection letters? I honestly think that if you submit this essay that is exactly what will happen.</p>