Read my "Why Major" Essay for Columbia?

Hi everyone! I’m writing my supplements for Columbia University, and just finished working on my “Why Major” essay. I was wondering if anyone can help me make sure I provided an accurate response to the question asked.

I’m working one mine as well, so I won’t have any ‘wise and retrospective’ abilities for review but I’d be happy to help out if you want

Yes, I will offer a brief critique if you private message it to me.