Read & review my essay please

<p>If you are able to give me some insight and a review of my essay I would appreciate it. I cant private message any of the readers listed since I'm a new poster on CC and CC rules say I must have at least 15 prior post. I'm down to two weeks on applying and before I send this off I'd love to have other opinions. Thank you.</p>

<p>I’ll read it :)</p>