Really need some constructive criticism

<p>I have a couple supplemental essays that I just need to touch up, but in order to do so I need an outside point of view. They're both commonapp so if anyone is willing to do so please just let me know!</p>

<p>i’d like to read it.</p>

<p>I’ll read it!</p>

<p>I’ll read them if you like</p>

<p>Thanks everyone! Can each of you pm me your emails and I’ll send them to you?</p>

<p>I’d love to read</p>

<p>Sure, I wouldn’t mind giving you some feedback. Also, I’ve submitted my common app + essays for Early Action so nothing to worry bout.</p>

<p>If you guys pm me your emails I can send them to you…again, it’s greatly appreciated!</p>

<p>you really can’t be posting ur ps online. People eevry year get denied from the university bec once you post it online, nothing is stopping those imbeciles from just copying and pasting it on the UC app. Take it to ur friends, teachers, advisors, counselrs ext. BUT NOT ONLINE TO RANDOMS. Trust me.</p>