<p>How do I properly fix this sentence:</p>
<p>Whitman, on the other hand, welcomed disciples to his home, commanding as he aged a wide audience. </p>
<p>??? </p>
<p>Should there be a comma after commanding and after aged? Thanks!</p>
<p>bumpppppppp... you people are geniuses... I'm sure you all know how to fix the error. It's for a test-prep thing.</p>
<p>"Whitman, on the other hand, welcomed disciples to his home, commanding as he aged a wide audience." </p>
<p>I think the last part is pretty vague... I'd write the sentence this way:</p>
<p>"Whitman, on the other hand, welcomed disciples to his home, commanding a wide audience even as he aged."</p>
<p>or this way:</p>
<p>"Whitman, on the other hand, welcomed disciples to his home, commanding, even as he aged, a wide audience." </p>
<p>I don't know if it's really a grammer problem, but it definately is roundabout. I put in the "even"s to enhance the contrast. </p>
<p>Is this an SAT question?</p>
<p>CLeighDrie has done a good job.</p>
<p>If you stick to the original sentence, commas around "as he aged" would help. But it is is bad style to separate a verb from its object like that.</p>
<p>Just slightly switch the sentence </p>
<p>Whitman, on the other hand, welcomed disciples to his home, commanding a wide audience as he aged.</p>
<p>how does this problem fit into the sat test categories??</p>
<p>It's called the writing section... Thank you, everyone! You guys rock!</p>