<p>I just finished my draft of commonapp essay. I may use this to apply Harvard, Yale, Dart, Brown, etc.(don't know if i have a chance...)</p>
<p>I believe this piece is interesting and moving. It also relates to my homecountry's culture and acient empire:) </p>
<p>Does anyone want to read it and give me your suggestions? I really need help and any advice is appreciated.</p>