Hi! So, I’m wondering as of the current SAT - how do you people manage to get 12’s? I’ve read Academic Hackerz and it isn’t doing the trick. I barely have enough time to write my SECOND EXAMPLE. Then I have to rush it as well as the conclusion, and I’m stuck with this stupid 8 destroying my writing score. I mean, I had 4 MCQ errors and an 8 essay in the October SAT - and I got a bloody 670! What?!
Please, for the love of God, post your 12 essays here. I’ve read literally all other 12 essays in existence. Sorry if this seems like a rant, just really desperate to get my writing score up as I’m a complete failure when it comes to CR.
I got a 8 first ( 2 body paragraphs) then a 9 this time ( 2.5 body paragraphs) pretty sure I will be bale to get a 10 if i do 3 paragraphs of the same size for examples.
Alright. Anyway, November is tomorrow. Please, anyone, hook me up. D - :
I know I’m gonna ace the MCQ this time so it’d be a shame if I got an 8 again. Is there any hope to make sure I get at the very least a 10 tomorrow? I don’t think so.
It shouldn’t take so much time to write one example. You actually have plenty of time to put in 2 examples. If you are having a hard time coming up with examples just BS. For example I made up a chinese dude on the October test and said Hamilton wasn’t involved in politics.
Prompt: Should young people focus their efforts on developing just one talent?
Response: The presumption that young people should focus their efforts on developing just one talent is erroneous. Although some idealistic critics would argue that to focus on just one talent is to hone that particular talent to mastery, these critics are too dogmatic in their narrow views. Focusing on developing multiple talents in a young person helps them better face the world in which a repertoire of skills is needed to face the problems of everyday life. Two notable archetypes that exemplify the benefits of developing multiple talents are the Rennaisance-conceived ideal of “the Rennaisance man”, and modern neuroscience.
Before the Rennaisance, life consisted of a period shamed by historians even today, known as the “dark ages”. Gender stereotypes were heavily prevalent, so women would take care of the households and children while the men would go out and find a proper job to provide the family with a stable income. The reason this period is referred to as “the dark ages” is because there were no profound discoveries or advancements; history was at a seemingly stand-still situation. But then came the Rennaisance, brilliant referred to as the “rebirth” of art and culture. Soon, the conception of an ideal human being was created, known as “the Rennaisance man”.“The Rennaisance man” referred to someone who is not only adept at one skill, but also skilled in numerous other fields. One of the most famous “Rennaisance men” was Leonardo DaVinci. When one thinks of DaVinci today, one relates him to such famous paintings that are still prominent today such as the “Mona Lisa” or “The Last Supper”. But did you know Leonardo DaVinci was also an adroit inventor? DaVinci would fill pages and pages of his sketchbook with any invention that came to his mind: one of the most famous of these sketches seemed to be some sort of flying contraption. The point is, DaVinci’s sketches helped him move the cogs in his brain, and in fact indirectly vitalized his artistic work. For example, he created the artistic conception of an imaginary horizontal line in which all other drawings in the picture would be scaled by the line. As can be seen by the idea of “the Rennaisance man”, if young people develop multiple talents , they are falling in the footsteps of such ingenious inventors as Leonardo DaVinci.
Neuroscience also conceives to us the importance of developing multiple talents because if you only develop one talent, gray matter will form in the rest of your brain. Gray matter keeps your brain from running fast and effectively. That is why many young people of today try to learn to play an instrument: it helps them work a different part of their brain, and effectively increases the capacity of one of the most important organs found in the human body.
In summation, it is important for young people to develop multiple talents so that they can aspire to the Rennaisance ideal of “the Rennaisance man” and also work all parts of their brain. Only then can young people face all aspects and problems life can possibly throw there way.
That’s a good essay @JuicyMango. Nice job. I see two ways to improve it.
The easier one is developing a better argument for your second example. it seems like you ran out of time or something, but it clearly was less developed than the first example, including in the most important part - the argument supporting your thesis.
The second area where you could improve is word choice. Many of your words are not used properly. Examples include: shamed, stand-still situation, brilliant, relates, vitalized (not a word), conception, conceives. Most of your “SAT Words” were used properly but many of the more pedestrian words were not.
I’m not sure if learning to improve your word choice is the most efficient way to improve your overall score since it would take a lot of time. But it could improve the score on your next essay and may also be helpful in college and beyond.
