Review my CA essay please?

<p>I'm looking for someone to critique my Common App college essay. Post here/message me if you would be willing to edit it! Thanks!</p>

<p>I’ll read! PM me</p>

<p>I can help.</p>

<p>of course</p>

<p>PM.</p>

<p>Pm me</p>

<p>Same, I can read!</p>

<p>I’ll read it and give feedback, PM it to me.</p>