Review part of my application please

Applying to College
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<p>I'm filling out my application for UCF and wanted some feedback on my list. They have a section for each of the three topics that I will copy+paste the info into.</p>

<p>extracurricular activities:</p>

<p>Countless weekends volunteering for i9sports (18- 8 week long seasons)</p>

<p>National Honor Society (3 years)</p>

<p>Art club (2 years)</p>

<p>Basketball (2 years) (Captain 1 year)</p>

<p>National Honor Society for Science (1 year)</p>

<p>Junior Advisory Board</p>

<p>Senior Executive Board</p>

<p>Set up prom</p>

<p>community service:</p>

<p>Managed the field operations and moved up to co-manager of flag football for the youth sports league i9sports
Coached every age group (4-16) in basketball for i9sports</p>

<p>Have 450 hours on log for i9sports, but really have 600+ seeing how I couldn't log the hours I volunteered prior to high school</p>

<p>Volunteered for both Special Olympics events last year, will do the same this year</p>

<p>Freshman orientation past 2 years</p>

<p>Miracle league</p>

<p>Relay for Life</p>

<p>Manna Food Drive</p>

<p>Toys for Tots</p>

<p>talents and awards:</p>

<p>Been told I'm great with kids (Even had a few parents personally thank me for how I interacted with their children at i9sports and have been awarded the name of Uncle Bran Bran from my nephews)</p>

<p>Have 30 full note cards, a nearly complete journal, and many pictures of my white board scribbled with words and diagrams of psychological/philosophical ideas and experiences</p>

<p>Just began blogging/making YouTube videos (building off the note cards, journal, and whiteboard pictures)</p>

<p>Innate tendency to lead</p>

<p>Always the one to present group projects to the class</p>

<p>Can dunk a basketball</p>

<p>Final grade for every class since kindergarten has been an A</p>

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<p>I wouldn’t include some of that stuff. For the EC section, I wouldn’t say “countless weekends” of volunteering. You should say “volunteering for i9sports (18- 8 week long seasons)” and leave it at that – clearly it isn’t “countless weekends” as you seemed to have been able to count them.</p>

<p>Some of the things you included under “talents and awards” aren’t really talents or awards. I personally wouldn’t include that you’ve been told you were great with kids – there’s nothing to support that. I also wouldn’t include the notecards you have filled with ideas. That’s irrelevant. If that’s really important to you, work it into an essay. I’m not really sure what the school means by “talents,” but personally I think a tendency to lead, presenting group projects, and dunking a basketball aren’t quantifiable talents or awards. They sound like something you would put on a job application rather than a college application (although dunking a basketball just doesn’t seem pertinent at all). Also, don’t say that your final grade for every class since kindergarten has been an A. You’re sending them your high school transcript and they’ll be able to see that for themselves.</p>

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<p>Good advice for the first part. Also agree with the taking out of the straight A’s. I think I’ll work in the note cards and YouTube in the essay also. I’m gonna keep the other stuff in there though because 1) I don’t have much else to put in there and 2) It adds some personality and shows I have am proud of my accomplishments outside of the academic field, even if they aren’t quantifiable. Without them my list is going to look the same as every one elses, saying I’ve been in these standard clubs and volunteered for these typical school things.</p>

<p>Thanks for the advice!</p>