Risky essay - WWYD?

Colleges and Universities A-Z Rice University
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<p>I am very happy with my supplemental essays for Rice (the Why Rice, "what will you bring," and the Why X school at Rice) but my common app essay has turned out a bit risky.</p>

<p>It's about gambling, almost. It's a descriptive piece about when I went to see a jai-alai game. I purposely added a few lines to sway the addictive undertone: "Life is a gamble, but this wasn't about gambling." and "My best friend told me I was addicted to jai-alai, but this wasn't about gambling." (Purposely parallel structure) However, a main body paragraph is dedicated to me deciding which player to bet on and its true (and obvious) that I like to bet occasionally. </p>

<p>I don't want to come off as an addict, do you think that will be an issue? Should I chop it all up and start with a new topic entirely? I am quite attached to this essay, as I am to every essay I write. I feel that it is well written in the sense that it has voice, style, creativity, and rhythm, but does that outweigh the content?</p>

<p>I am willing to PM my essay to those who have already been admitted to college if you need to read it directly to give me true advice.</p>

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<p>My best friend told me I was addicted to jai-alai, but to me, life is a gamble; this wasn't about gambling</p>

<p>Subject is fine if you word it right.</p>

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<p>I'd say you should never be afraid of what you write, especially if you want to be an English major.</p>

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<p>I think you'd be better off asking an experienced teacher to read your essay and give you advice as to the content than anonymous students on the 'net. Without reading the essay, there's no way to tell if you should scrap it or not, and when it comes to essays, your teacher would probably give much better advice than us anyway.</p>